Show Don’t Tell

One way to make your work fascinating is to use the active rather than the passive voice.

Passive

Passive designates a form of the verb by which the verbal action is attributed to the person or thing to whom it is actually directed: i.e. the logical object is the grammatical subject.  E.g.  He was seen by us.  Passive.  The opposite of active.  Active: We saw him.

In a grammatically active construction, the subject is performing the action.

eg Jack ate the chocolate. (Jack is the subject, he’s performing the action, the chocolate is the object.)

 

My infant memories are of the stories I made up, the stories read to me and the night sky coloured by fires, the aftermath of incendiary bombs.

 

I grew up first in Kent and then Surrey from where I visited ‘the sights’ such as St Pauls Cathedral, the Tower of London, Westminster Cathedral, Dick Whittington’s stone on Highgate Hill and St James Park.  In the countryside, to name a few, I visited Hampton Court, Richmond, Windsor and Eton.  My heritage inspired my love of history.  I read voraciously and my imagination grew.

 

My infant memories are of the stories I made up, the stories read to me and the night sky coloured by fires, the aftermath of incendiary bombs.

I grew up first in Kent and then Surrey from where I visited ‘the sights’ such as St Pauls Cathedral, the Tower of London, Westminster Cathedral, Dick Whittington’s stone on Highgate Hill and St James Park.  In the countryside, to name a few, I visited Hampton Court, Richmond, Windsor and Eton.  My heritage inspired my love of history.  I read voraciously and my imagination grew.